Wednesday, January 12, 2011

Snowboarding

Authors Note: needed to finish this for one of my tasks also I thought it would be interesting to write this with ski club and stuff.

You are at the top of a hill with the sun reflecting off the new layer of snow. While strapping in your boot you plan out the rout to follow. When you are finished you stand up with your board parallel to the bottom of the hill. You jump and twist so you start down the hill. While you go down the hill you notice that you are rapidly gaining speed so you simply turn 90 degrees and lead back (to slow down). As you continue down the hill you slow down again you catch a bump of snow and you fly forward. You tumble down the hill and slide to the bottom.

When you get back to the top of the hill you move downward again but you are being careful not to fall. You avoid the area were you fell down before and then speed down the hill just to see how fast you can go. As you are speeding down the hill the sun is setting and many vibrant colors are filling the sky.You noticed something you didn't before... A Ramp.

There is not enough time to turn so you fly up in the air. Everything slows down. Your heart races. As you hit the ground you balance yourself.

You made it! You feel a sense of accomplishment come over you. When you get to the bottom you jump with joy and shout.

The next times you go down you feel like nothing can stop you-you are invincible. You go into the lodge to tell your friends. You didn't see them. You checked the time and noticed that the bus leaves in 5 minuets! You ran to the locker area, took of your snow stuff and ran to the bus. You have just made it. When you got on the bus you sit next to your friend and tell them your story. You will never forget this day.

4 comments:

  1. This is a really good post. It shows your voice well. It was really discriptive. There were a few punctual and grammatical errors, but otherwise, good job!

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  2. Your introduction was extremely well written. How you used the fictional narative made it superior. Your storyline was thought through. I like how he fell the first time but made it the second time.

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  3. This is an interesting piece in that you use that same voice, speaking to the reader as if the reader is actually doing all the action. I wish you had some more recent postings here. When was the last time you posted?

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  4. Did this ever happen to you? Great post. You had some good word choice.

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