I am walking through the woods again, but this time everything looks different. The leaves are gone and snow covers the ground in a soft blanket as frozen rain ever so slowly floats down from the clouds.
As I continue I wonder where all the animals had gone. The birds, the squirrels, and all the others that I had seen before. Then I notice a rabbit to my left gracefully hopping between the trees. It is white like the snow and it's little white tail looks like a snow ball stuck in its fur.
As I wonder through the woods I see the stream again but now it is covered in a thin layer of ice. as I continue down stream the stream speeds up and the layer of ice is gone, it flows through a cave and over a cliff. As I go through the cave the crystals on the wall sparkle in the light coming from the ceiling.
Once I get out I go down the path to the bottom of the waterfall and decide to explore the woods nearby.
I go through two bushes and shrubs and the farther I travel the more dense the woods get. I go through another large bush and get snow down my back. Up ahead I see a clearing so I just head towards it when I got out I saw a large field. Then I notice that there is a small cabin In the middle of the field.
It looks old and deserted so I entered. When the door opened it creaked and squeaked and the wall paper was peeling off. It was a one level home with a small kitchen and one bathroom a bedroom and a family room the table had some string and fabric on the table. There was a plasma screen TV in the family room and the bedroom. The TVs had all the channels so I could watch any thing.
There was a note on the table. I picked it up and it said:
Dear person that finds this letter,
I am growing old so I have moved to a retirement home. You may have this cabin if you want. All the bills are paid so you wont have to worry about paying. Make this place what ever you want to make it.
Mrs. Lady person
I decided to stay the night so I called my mom and told her where I was and I will be home first thing in the morning . I went over to the family room and turned on the TV. Then I made some hot chocolate and started to make a flag out of the material on the counter. My finished product was two hammers crossed with a trident in front. (The blue represents justice. The hammers represent my creativity and the trident represents Pisces, its natural element is water witch is related to a trident and tridents are cool so yea). Then I got a big metal pole and attached it and hung it outside. It was getting late. So I went to bed.
I awoke the next day and got dressed. I made a quick breakfast and started to head out. I locked the door and put the key in my pocket. As I headed back I noticed the snow was starting to melt. I wondered why.
Then I remembered……it was the first day of spring.
I like that you are really enjoying fiction. There is a lot that can be learned about writing well that fiction can allow you to focus on. Be sure that you are always looking to your personal goals, setting your sites on how you can improve in one way or another as a writer. Then, as you compose, you will know that your work is contributing to your growth as a writer.
ReplyDeleteIn this selection, I would look to setting up an actual introduction, as the piece currently just sort of starts in the middle of a story. Also, be sure that whatever you post really reflects your best work. In other words, if there is a mistake on your blog, it should only really be there because you don't know it's a mistake as opposed to you missed it, or forgot to check.
Meanwhile, just keep up the fun approach to your blog. I enjoy going here and visiting your writing.
I liked the part where he makes it his home pretty much. it really pulled me in and
ReplyDeleteI just wanted to read the rest of it. I think that anyone would want to have that house I know I would. All in all I think the story was great.
I like the descriptive writing at the beginning. that element was kind of lost in the middle and end of the story. the story was good though. why can't I find an awesome cabin like that?
ReplyDeleteI wish I could find a cabin like that to because I could hangout there all the time.
ReplyDeleteIt says that it looked old and abandoned, so you entered, isn't that a reason not to enter?
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